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A famous person keeps a saying that putting all eggs in one basket is unwise.I just aggree with it.Putting all eggs together means holding a big danger.It is exactly an advisable choice.The correct method is dispersing the risk. This is to say we should have a plan B. For example in our life, we have to find a job after our school life.How to get a good position is important. We have to send many resumes to many complays. We won't put our resume in just one corporation on account of it is not proper to put all eggs in one basket.We should think twice before acting.We have to ponder deeply over the multiple factors and the best solution.So that we can come to an appropriate conclusion. The case above reveals a truth that putting all eggs in one basket is unwise.We should have more choice to select.In this way we can live much calmly.