作者在高级词汇方面要多下功夫,有些单词拼错了;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用;采用了一些简单的从句。
Time flies. I will graduated from university in a few month. When i looked back the four years has passed by, i got a lot both from physically and mentally . The first and formost character i have built is the personaliy of team-work spirit. No one could gain succese in this competive world. The sense of team-work spirit makes a basic foundation for successful live .Secondly, Just as the old Chinese story "Three Monks" told us that we should take the duties actively and respectively . Only in this way ,could our nationg developed into a harmonious and glorious society .Last but least, cooperation is a marvolus quality for every works of life. It is hard to imagine how to live happily without coperating with others . In fact ,what i have learned in university is far from this . To be intelligent, hardworking ,warm hearted ,friendly will influened a lot in my later life for a long run.