语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者英语功底扎实,可适当调整文中从句数量;作者词汇表达比较多样,也能较好的使用一些高级词汇。
Due attention should be given to spelling These days,some students didn't take notice to spell in study English,It show this condition cause and leads to a falut,because of technical and science is developing,many family use computer to write word,for a change this condition,I think about that society call on spell in English,school ecourage to writing,family spend more time on spell with their children,it is necessary for us to spell.therefore,government sends out a policy to support from spell,I hope that people take action to spell,whenever our do,we want to take action,we keep up with the modern time fashion at the same time,and don't forget tradition Chinese spell.due attention should be given to spelling.