语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;作者句法知识掌握的不够好,可适当增加从句的使用。
Due attention should be given to spelling These days,some students didn't take notice to spell in study English,It showS this condition cause and leads to a fault,because of technical and science is developing,many family use computer to write word,for a change this condition,I think about that society call for spell in English,school encouraged to writing,family spend more time on spell with their children,it is necessary for us to spell.therefore,government sends out a policy to support from the spell,I hope that people take action to spell,whenever our do,we want to take action,we keep up with the modern time fashion at the same time,and don't forget tradition Chinese spell.Due attention should be given to spelling.