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新东方托福高分作文:我居住的城市的优缺点

发布时间:2013-07-23 16:11浏览次数:6153
要求:

【题目要求】

A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

【题目分析】

这是一个讨论假设问题的题目。尽量展开想象。注意:不要只说my city,要指出你所在城市的名字, 比如:Beijing, Shanghai等等。人们会喜欢的有:女人喜欢商场;男人可能喜欢书店;大的公园、动物园;名胜古迹;文化氛围;人们会讨厌的有:交通堵塞;空气不新鲜;大城市的排外主义(exclusivism)、不友善(unfriendly);
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I live in Beijing, which is a multicultural city as the capital of our country.Living here has both advantages and disadvantages like a coin has two sides. In my perspective, the pace of life in my city is not as high as that in Shanghai. Beijing is a milder city where rivalry isn't so fierce. Also, the access to big shopping mall or a library possessing large quantities of books is really convenient. Besides, there is no exclusivism in Beijing where the local people are all very friendly and warm-hearted.These things listed above are what I believe my friend will like. When it comes to the disadvantages to live in Beijing, I hold the belief that the most important reason must be the terrible weather. I cannot see the sun often in Bejing due to the big smog. And the temperature which always falls below zero is incredible to me. How cold it is here! Maybe my friend also hates this bad weather. Here are my opinions about the conditions my friend will like or dislike.

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