拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
As for my hometown,it is a beautiful and ancient city,Anqing,where there are located at mid of China,south-east of Anhui province.Although it is not as famous as Shanghai or Beijing, you can enjoy a beautiful and peaceful countryside life over there. It must be saying the Tianzhushan scenery is a typical place.If you like hiking or climbing, it is wonderful for you.In fact,it is also a historical interest.There are so many recording of history on the mountains,I think it would be a good way to know some story about history and help you to understand a lots of Chinese culture.And it is more important that you can feel the peace ,release your stress of work or study and rethink your life. Except Tianzhushan,I hold idea that xiaohushan deserve your visit.It is a special scenery in China.It stand in the Changjiang,which is longest river in china and also is a symbol of one of Chinese culture.When you stand on the top of the mountain,you can overlook the Changjing and enjoy the a very fascinate picture of river and mountain.there is a temple on the top of the mountain,so you can meet different people who pray for their families there.