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In the modern,busy and fast-paced society,it has become prevailing and prevalent for individuals to come to China.When taking a glance around,we can easily find a sea of people,male or female,old or youth,in coming my hometown experience different cultural and taste food.Since you will come my city,i am willing to accompany you to visit Xi an. What,you may wonder,can account for it.On my personal level,two forcing factors contribute to it.To begin with,the reason why Xi an has long history is no other than the fact that Xi an,has many scenery spots,is history city of 13 dynasties .In addition,Xian is closely relate to well-know in the world. By enjoying Xi an,you are bound to have further understanding of China,which will enrich your history achievement.It will give you a new view of the outside world.I am sure that it must be a wonder and unforgettable experience for you.