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The diagram above clearly a demonstrates dramatic change in different degree unemployment rate in 2001,have the high school diploma,bachelors degree and doctor degree respectively. People’s unemployment rate ,high school diploma is very high,people’s unemployment rate is decline with bachelor’s degree, and unemployment rate is drop that doctoral degree compare with high school diploma. Based on the chart,we can safely come to a conclusion that unemployment rate is on the decline with the degree on the rise. What,you may wonder,can account for this change,on my personal level,two forcing factors contribute to it.To begin with,the reason why the degree is vital is no other than the fact that society compete is increasingly intense,the employers have express a preference for individuals who have received a broadly-based education that has taught them to write well,think critically,research creatively and communicate easily.In addition,the change is closely related to people’s think has change about education.