2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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I am glad that you are going to visit my hometown.As a local citizen, it is my pleasure to take you to the most interesting place in my hometown--the Great Wall. It is a miracle as a result that it is built by ancient people in Qing dynasty.The ancient people have no advanced technoligy or machine except their hand.They cross mountains,transmitting stones.They devote their labors,caving a broad road.They even contribute their cherished lives to the Great Wall.It is the unknown and ordinary people that buit the magnificent structure. When you visit the Great Wall,you must have been shocked by its scenes.the Great Wall meanders through the mountains .Therefore,we can get close to nature,have a good view of mountains and hear wind blowing.