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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a head of a household appliance plant,which is a leading manufacturer of high-quality digital recorders.I am writing the letter for the purpose of inviting you to an exclusive presentation of some new models and a reception. The presentation will take place at Nobel Hotel on the third of January.I would consider it a great honor if you could come.After the presentation,there will also be a reception at two o'clock.I do hope you will attend too. Since your presence is of vital importance to this occasion,I genuinely hope that you can make it.I look forward to seeing you on that day. Yours sincerely, Zhang Wei