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行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用；作者词汇量比较丰富，一些高级词汇的使用也比较灵活，但要避免出现拼写错误；可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
The Dragon Boat Festival is a special festival for Chinese people to memory a great poet Qu Yuan who is loyalty to our country. At that time ,goverment held dragon boat competition to celebrate our festival ,a great award will be won by those people who are the first team arrive destination. In my viewpoint, i think it's meaningful to held dragon boat competition.Fistly.It's a festival mark in Chinese traditional culture .We uphold solidarity ,persistent spirit in boating by generation to gerneration.Secondly,Both of us enjoy the harmony and happiness from the festival .Thirdly.holding an acctivity is contriute significantly to govenment keep a touch with citizen closely. In conclusion,we should inherit traditional culture by generation to generation.
