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Yesterday we got a new sports teacher. His name is Karl. He is very strong that he can lift up a 100kg subject. He has two big eyes and a big nose. He is very tall. I think he is 190 centimetre's tall. He looks very unkind. But what happened yesterday changed my thought. When we were having the PE class, one of my classmate hurt her knees. They were bleeding very badly. All of us were extremely frightened, while Karl immediately fixed everything. I like Karl. We will be good friends in the future.