2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

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With the development of science,now,more and more people have their own mobile phone.However,with the improvement of the mobile phone,many persons prefer seeing mobile phone to seeing this beautiful world.People are even crossing the street with looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. Why more and more people like seeing cell phone?I think ,one of the most important reasons is that the functions of phones are improving step by step.And most people think these functions are very interesting. However,using too much mobile phones are not benefitical.If we use it too much ,we may not withdraw from it .Also,phones may not good at our eyes. So,forgive your phones,and make you see this beautiful world,you must find many more interesting things.