文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;全文结构较为严谨。
I remembered a busy day one minute ago. It was last wednesday and the weather was bad. At the morning I received a call about a case that our goods cannot be delivered because of a typhoon, and then I thought I will have trouble. When I came in the office, then found the door was not opened yet. We all stand at the door and waiting for our colleague Kelly. Finally,Kelly was coming at ten o' clock.It was so late!Right?