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Along with the advanced of theInternet,the online shopping which is become popular.of course,everything has two sides,advantage and disadvantage.on the one hand,shopping on the Internet improved the finance quickly developing.on the other hand,it save a plenty of time for people to do other things.the bad side that we can find which is effecting our work and harming our eyes. As far as I am concernd,weshould take some measures to solve this problem.