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文中应增加一些长难句的使用，会为文章添彩；词汇表达较灵活准确，高级词汇使用过少，另外注意文中个别的拼写错误；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用；
when we talk of the famous proverb"the greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it." Indeed,just in my opinion,I think it's reasonable.my life time is limit,we haven't time to waste.because of that we should do meaningful things.for insurance,we must study hard and reduce the burden of the parents. Besides,if we want to our life become more beautiful,not only just state in school and dormitory,which mare us turn into a nerd and become lazy.No matter what,having a chance to society exercise or take part in more activies ,which riching our after school life. All in all,I think that only if do more do meaning of things make our life more meaningful.It also improving our ability and broaden horizons.Whatever,one thing is certain:the greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it.This is the truth.
