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Dear Mary, I'm very happy when i know you will come my hometown.It's universally ackonwledged that China is beatiful's country,The Guizhou as an improtant part of China's city,there is no doubt that it's worth to viist. First of all, when you come Guizhou,i will take you to the wall of Huangguoshu,I believe you are interest in it.the reason why the wall of huangguoshu is longest of world. what's more,personally,i believe that you are a crazy eat food man.Consequently,i'm confident that a bright future is awaiting us because there have many deliciou foods in my hometown.such as,noodles,richand so on. Last but not least,with the development of guizhou,there have many interest games,like and like make good friends.this is reason we can become good friends. so precious is time that we can't afford to use it.i'm wait for you in my hometown. yours,xiaoyu