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I'm very delighted to hear that a foreign will take vacation in my hometown and there is no doubt that we will realize a fascinating place. By and large,my hometown is famous for all kinds of fruits and nature scenes and as we all know,people always call it 'land of lemons and fruits',which including Aksu apple,Hami lemon,kuerle pear,watermelon and so on.Of course,you can also sample local various magic and ancient culture that had been develop thousands years ago.In other words,you will feel different culture and fall in love with it if you arrive there and fully feel the culture. Finally,I really hope you can like there if you can come and my families will welcome you with a very enthusiam in my hometown!Come on!