简单句偏多了;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳;
My friend is boy .He is very chever. He is good at playing games and swimming and so on.he learn very hard. No body likes him.but he is my best friend.He often help me with my trouble.He is hero.When l have trouble he alwaye coming.He often talk about his dream with me.We have the same dream.