commit a crime 犯罪
句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;
A letter to High School Students Dear friends, Jun 26th is the International Day Against Drug Abuse and Illicit Trafficking every year and it aims to keep people from drugs. As we all know, drugs are harmful to our health. Taking drugs increases people's heart rate and blood pressure. Drug takers may suffer from heart attacks. It is easy for drug takers to become addicted to drugs, but it is hard for them to break this addiction. Drugs cost people pretty money. If they don't have enough money to buy drugs, they will suffer great pain. In that case they may commit a crime. When you see drug takers, you should call the police. Keep away from people who take drugs and don't keep in touch with them. If you find someone around drugs, you should call the police; Stay away from drug addicts, no contact with them