题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
拼写做的很棒,高级词汇可适量增加;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;
Computer and man With the effort of many outstanding people,computer becomes a part of our life finally. Beause of the computer,the world becomes a village which is called global village.People around the world can communicate without the limit of distance and language.It's more possible for the thoughts to collide and produce many exciting ideas.Also,we get a marvelous quantity of news about many aspects such as cultures,arts,sciences and so on,which we don't have access to know before.Our lives are really changed by the computers completely which offer a new way of making friends to us.What's more,computer relief our hands,which urges our study and work more convenient and efficient. However, every con has two sides.Although computer brings many advantages to people,it also has a bad effect on the society.Many children are addicted to computer games so that dilapidated their study,even some end their lives by themselves finally.Besides,much information about force and eroticism encroaches on teenagers. So,as far as I'm concerned,computer and man are connected tightly.