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Here is a photograph of Jims on the table and now let me introduce them to you. As you see,there are four people on the picture.The man on the left is Jim's father,his job is an engineer and he is now working at a big firm.Jim told me that he is very proud of his father.I know what he means and he means that he hopes to become the man like his father in the future.The lady next to the man is Jim's mother,his mother is very young and beautiful.Do you know what her job is,she is wearing a mink coat and with a big ring,actually,she is an actress in this city.At present,she has already played many different roles.They have a dog in their family,its name is Dudu and he is very fat.The last one left is Jim and he is a student of high school and he will graduate from school next year.