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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11317
要求:

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词,衔接手法做的很棒;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;

用户练习作文:

With the development of science and technology, cell phone becomes more and more popular in our live. Different people have different ways of using cell phone. Some people employ it whole day. In spite of what thing they were doing, like this picture which people are crossing street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. Different people have different opinion, in my opinion, I against the way of this picture to use cell phone, because this way is danger, they lost themselves in their cell phones. so they easy no attend to the car on road or some person before them, sometime this condition cause some accident. I thank that we should make good use of cell phone rather than fall into it. Using cell phone can help us to keep contact with our friends who live in distant, but use it badly will cause us loss some chance to face to face taking.

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