建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用;若加重从句在文中的比例,文章会很棒;请作者增加词汇丰富度,文中也有较多拼写错误。
Everyone have al lot of friends ,but best freind only one among the them . I best friend's name is guli we are the some age , some class and some name . we are go school toghter , stuyding togher , palying game toghter and wacthing movie toghter . she is very beautiful and kindless. I like him very much . she favorite activity is reading , listening and talking with me. I hope our frindship continue forever.