正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
Dear David, I am so glad that you are considering learning Chinese in Beijing.I am writing to tell you something about Chinese. It is funny to learn Chinese because the Chinese traditional culture is tempting. I am sure you will be addicted to Chinese. To learn Chinese well, I think you can take into the following advice into consideration. Firstly, keeping a diary in Chinese may help you to use Chinese more fluently.Secondly, you should expose yourself to Chinese as much as you can for the reason that it is practice that mixed with perseverance that makes perfect. Last but not least, it is necessary to learn Chinese systematically and a standard dictionary will do good. May you a great progress. I am looking forward to your latest news. Yours, Wang Ming