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I am very glad to here that you will come to China and spend your holiday in China. Now I will tell you something about the things to do on the Mid-Autumn festival.It is something improtant for chinese people and has a long history.It is a special occision for people to get together and have dinner.Usually,we eat moon cakes after having dinner.What is more,we watch the moon together.The moon is always the biggest and the brightest on that day. I wish you will have a good time when you come.