句式灵活多变,再加强从句的使用会更棒;全文结构较为严谨;作者词汇量偏小,且文章中拼写错误较多。
my home,where at the xiaoshang hangzhou,my home have fife pepole ,wife miss xu and my son jerry and my wife parents.our live very happy,we go to climb mounting ,at aftenoon,then back home at 18:00,we like sports,becaues sports will make our healthy.sometimes,we go to walk go outside ,becuse outside's air is fresh.