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过渡词很丰富，衔接词同时使用的恰到好处；文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用高级词汇就更好了；文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用。
Nowadays,happiness which has many means in different people's heart.As me,happiness that I stay with my family at home and we can live well.It is sound so easy,in reality,is too difficult.First,as a high school student who should stay at school dormitory,live with my pupil.Only in holiday,such as,weekends,festival,I can back home.Of course,at home,my duty is doing homework.In a sense,I not have quite a lot of time which accompany family.In addition,my parent who have own work,sometimes,when I have leisure time,maybe they don't have,it's so sad for us.For this purpose,we take a plan that we should walking or do anything together once a month,and also when I back home who need to have dinner at table. My parent and I use this approach which think is happiness.
