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Nowadays,happiness which has many means in different people's heart.As for me,happiness that I can accompanies my parents.It is sound so easy,in reality,is too difficult.First,I‘m a high school student who should stay at school every day and live with my pupil.Only in holiday,such as,weekends,festival,I can back home.Of course,at home,my duty is doing homework.In a sense,I not have quite a lot of time which accompanies my families.In addition,my parents who have own work,sometimes,when I have leisure time,maybe they don't have,it's so sad for us.For this purpose,we take a plan that we should walk or do anything together once a month,and also when I back home who needs to have dinner at table. My parents and I use this approach which thinks are happiness.