词汇表达不够丰富,要增加高级词汇的使用;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅。
From: Li ming Date: Dec. 23rd, 2008 Dear Mary Chen, I will go to Beijing for a week on business. So I have no time to talk with you about the celebration of new year. Please tell me the eventual decision you have made, including the date, location and preparation needed. Li ming