采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者句法知识扎实,但文中从句数量稍显不足;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了。
My hometown is Harbin. Winter season is the most beautiful season in Harbin. We have ice and snow festival every Jan. On that time, you will see a lot of snow or ice sculptures on both sides of the street. But the biggest and the most beautiful sculptures are in the Sun island. Harbin government will invite many artists come to harbin to creative sculptures , so you can imagine how beautiful the snow and ice sculptures will be. On the other hand, the local people also will build huge snow and ice plaza with recreational facilities, tourists not only to visit sculptures but also play in it. of cause, play is not only thing you can do in there, I will take you to the center street which is very famous street in Harbin. The street make you feel like in Europe.There are some Russian restaurants, if you like we can go over there to have a try.