采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;从句数量偏少;文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了。
In my desk have a photograph about my family,see the tall man,he is my father ,he is a freelancer,who close to the man is my mother,she is a worker,and this old woman is my grandmother,because she is so old,so she does't has work,she always do the homework when she has free time,she is a studious woman. And the little boy is my brother,he is a student of grade three.And look at the last of the two girls,the gray girl is my sister,she is a student too. Now she is a high school student.And the black girl is me,i'm a worker too.We are happy family