文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Dear David, I am so glad that you are considering learning Chinese in Beijing.I am writing to tell you something about Chinese study. It is funny to learn Chinese because of the Chinese traditional cultural temptation. I am sure you will be addicted to it. To learn Chinese well, I think you can take into the following advice into consideration. Firstly, keeping a diary in Chinese which help you to use Chinese more fluently can also help you review your mistakes.Secondly, you should expose yourself to Chinese as much as you can because it is practice that mixed with perseverance that makes perfect. Last but not least, it is necessary to learn Chinese systematically and a standard dictionary will do good. May you make great progress. I am looking forward to your latest news. Yours, Wang Ming