拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。
Many people are attracted by foreign festival because of its special charm.I am one of them who is attracted by festivals.So,I think it is a good thing for our life. First,many people are busy with working for their lives and futures.They are so tired that they need to take a rest.That is why they celebrate foreign festivals such as Christmas.Through those activities of the festivals,people will get warm and happiness. Another important reason is that celebrating foreign festivals helps stimulate economic growth and learn foreign history.Besides,with the development of science and technology,the earth has become a global village.Those festivals can exchange eastern and western cultures. In brief,celebrating foreign festivals is a good thing.But we can not be crazy about it.We celebrate foreign festivals to have fun.If we forget our own festivals in order to celebrate foreign festivals,we will lose out nature.