可适当增加从句的使用;作者词汇量积累不错,能够较恰当地使用高级词汇;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富。
Creating a green campus is essential for every undergraduate as comfortable environment is good for our heathy and spirit.Besides,green campus not only means green surface,but also represents confident,energetic,progressive and optimistic. In my perspective,most important of all we should concern environment where garbage is banned to throw about that will make a pleasant feeling.At the same time abusing water and papers will be criticized absolutely because of the lack of virtue,on the contrary it's suppose to save and recycle them by ourselves. On the one hand,restoring environment is no doubt,on the other hand academic activities are able to facilitate students to explore science so that they can make progress through much practice and severe debate.Eventually sports races are efficient for weak body to strengthen muscle and power before you urge to absorb others' attention pridefully. The green campus will come true in the case we make joint efforts not work individually.