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小学三年级英语作文:When I grow up

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:54浏览次数:2869
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用英语描述下自己长大后的理想,字数在100字以内。
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采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。

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All children want to grow up.They are curious about this world,it's the reason why they would like to think of it.When we were a child,however,a large number of homework used to be done.Including the weekends,the children didn't have any free time to play games,so I asked a boy who would do in the future and he told me that he didn't want to do homework anymore.If he grows up,he will have a plenty of time to travel.As you know,both adult and children are busier and busier than before.Many people think that life is a competition in the social,we must take part in it.When they all grew up,the pleasant days in the past would be missed,but it has never come back again.As a child,parents gave you some money and you could use it to buy something what you want to.When you became the adult,you must earn money at work and you had to solve problems by yourself.At the same time,you need to take care of your parents even if you had had trouble with life and worl.

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