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This weekend I went to the Beijing animals park. There were many tourists in the park. I saw they gave foods to monkeys and played with tigers. They were looked at so happy and friendly. They made me believe that people are friendly with animals. We should be kind to animals. But I found some people didn't pay attention to hygiene. They threw garbage here and there and made the park dirty. I thought it's important to protect enviroment. And I began to know that protect wile animals' important because protect animals just look like protection ourselves.