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l have a good firend. she is Millie. she is 13 years old .she is in Class 1 Grade 1 at sunshine middle school.she likes reading and playing volleydall.she is very pratty.she loves eat more vegetadles and fruits .shr has a good lifestyle.she is health.her favorite festival isthe spring festival.because she can wish her family members get together have a big dinner.she is my a really firend.