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Tina is a active girl and very like to travel. She want to go to Beijing that to see the Great Wall and other beautiful sights in Beijing. Beacause Beijing is a old and mordern city, she can become happy and has fun in it. Jim is a slience boy and like reading books and painting. He will stay at home this summer holiday. Beacause he is too tired and need has a good rest. I will go to Suzhou provience. I need raise my kills about life and look picture of out world. These are our discussions about what we would do in the coming summer vacation.