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Protect Our Environment Before many years ago ,our environment is so beautiful .But now,many people cut the trees,throw the litter here and there.That's why the breath in the earth is much worse than before. So we have the liability for protecting it.We should plant trees instead of cutting them.We can also hold some activities about protecting the environment ,it will be a lot of more fun.If we can ptotect our environment actively,I believe our earth garden will be better and better.