文章衔接手法恰当;注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;请作者加强词汇表达的灵活性,但文中有较多拼写错误。
My hometown I am a villiage girl,I love the place where I was birth. this is a beautiful viliage with massive trees arroundings ,the streams also has many fish on there,simple and urgly house anywhere,the street is narrow too. Nowadays ,the buildings and mensions are appeared in anywhere, expensive and cheep cars anywhere. Developing industry make the rnvironment terrible,the trees decreases and the fish was vinished . In my opnion, we should at once take a mesure to resolve the bad situation, we should protect the environment from ourself. Let us action.