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小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:36浏览次数:36953[网页划词已开启]
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用英文描述下自己的好朋友。
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文中从句数量过少;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;作者能较熟练地使用丰富的词汇,但请加强单词拼写的检查。

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Song Jixian was one of my best frind. His was 175 cm high with white skin, and was good at singing songs. So all of us called him handsome boy. Whem we met eachother, we both were only 16. At that time, we studied at Hunan Machinary Techghnician School. We were living at the same room and he slept above me. In the bite cool witer, we slept together in the same bad to get warm eachother. However, such a good friend left me too early. Hi was killed by a trafic accident when he was only 24 years old. He left his parents and his young wife passed away to another world. We all miss him very much.

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