可适当增加从句的使用;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累高级词汇,拼写错误也要注意;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
My Favorite Sport As we all know, we have our special thing in our mind. So I think your hobby is very impotant thing in your life. For me,football is my favorite sport. There are some reasons that make me like football. Maybe it is very fun. Oneday I picked up a football on my way home,and I play with my friends. The football gave me many things and made me think many things. So that day I felt very happy and like playing football with my friends after school. There has a football team in our school, and I am a teammate of the team. I am not hurry go home after school,and I always play with my teammates. Football made me make many feiends, so I do not feel lonely when I alone. My idol is British football player Beckham. Do you know my dream? Yes, my dream is to be a professional football player.And I will play football in many cities.