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过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错；简单句偏多，应增加从句使用；文中词汇表达较为丰富准确，但存在单词拼写错误。
A beautifyl city in China I would like to show you is HeYuan,which is my hometown. HeYuan is a small city in GuangDong province. It has many beautiful sences,such as WanLiuHu,Yuan DI and so on. Here i will show you the most beautiful site in my heart.that's WangLiuHu. WangLiuHu,which loacted in the east of HeYuan.Which famous for its color.when spring came. Wherever is covered with green."Liu" in chinese is green.Also WangLiuHu is famous for its water.The water in WangLiuHu is so cold that in the winter you scare to touch it,but in the summer you like the water so much. WangLiuHu has another famous sence.If you have time to travel it,you will travel it again.
