语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;作者句法基础较为扎实。
It is reported that thirty volunteers to be sent to the Mars who are at least 18 years old will be chosen from all the globe by the year of 2015. The volunteers must make a full preparation that there is almost no chance to return to the earth once they are immigrated to the Mars. What’s more, it is greatly important for them to try to keep a good relationship with other members. Experts strongly warned that the living conditions on the Mars are very hard, for not only the extremely cold climate would they meet with, but also loneliness and fear. On the contrary , the volunteers insist that they have got tired of the life on the earth, so greatly being eager to experience the unknown, mysterious life on the Mars; meanwhile, if the would be succeeded , they would get the honor to be heroes of human beings。