文中高级词汇表达比较恰当,但存在拼写错误;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Government money has distributed into many aspects,while,it has fuelled controversy over whether or not art should be supported by government. Science reseaches and social service can distinguish improve citizens' living standard.Technology,education and medical service can satisfy people's necessities.However,with the rapid development of economy,people graduately pay attention to inspiration. From my prospecture,the government should invest art.On the one hand,people have varities of needs.Art is a way to help people express their feelings and thought.Art have existed dating back to anti-society.The develped and perfect society always combine with gorgeous culture and splendid art.Without energetic art,the thought would be rigorous and the speed of develpment of economy and technology would slow down.Art is a bond for social cohension.Art which can across the border let people keep touch to each other Art cultivate people creative skill and show people's nurmerous ways to see the world. Government should invest social infrastricture and art together.Only in this way ,can we create an energetic society.
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