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2013年4月6日雅思大作文真题:人类在哪些领域取得了进步

发布时间:2013-08-08 16:44浏览次数:36765
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【题目要求

100 years ago, human race believed we would make continue progress in all areas of life. Today, some people feel less certain about this. what areas of progress human race has made? What else areas we haven't developed?

【点评一】

本题是2009年5月21日的话题,属于抽象类话题。抽象类话题看似难写,实际上只要转换成具体话题就容易手了。进步的领域:科技,教育。仍需改进的领域:环保,犯罪,人口老龄化,动物保护,文化语言保护。本题几乎无所不包,雅思写作题库中几乎所有话题都能用于本题。

【点评二】
题目  Some people think the human race has made continual progress in all areas of life, while others believe that there is less certainty about this. What areas of progress human race has made? What else areas we have not developed?
一些人认为人类在各方面已经取得了不断的进步,而另外一些人认为并非如此。人类在哪些领域取得了进步?哪些领域没有取得发展? 
开头段  How to make a better life never fails to capture people’s attention throughout much of the human history ,which serves as a catalyst for the continuing development in every aspect of life. Some people, however, believe that the so called “development” cannot be regarded as real progress. 
中间段1  回答第一问:人类在哪些领域取得了进步? 1. 众所周知,几个世纪以来,人类一直致力于通过发展科技来改善生存环境。
It is commonly believed that human beings have been striking for improving living conditions by evolving science and technology for many centuries.
【论证示范】
Due to the convenient transportation system, citizens in China are able to enjoy fresh American lemons which were once not available to Chinese or people in many other counties. Communication modes mainly relied on writing letters in the past also witnessed a significantly transformation with the advent of internet, making friends or families enable to contact each other instantly by their computers or tablets.2.其次,与过去相比,人类在医学领域取得了许多突破。
Furthermore, compared with the past , there are many breakthroughs having been achieved in medical care. 
中间段2  回答第二问:哪些领域没有取得发展? 1. 污染,全球变暖,物种灭绝等环境问题已经成为很多国家头痛的问题,它们经常会陷于经济发展和生态平衡的困境中。
Environmental problems in terms of pollutions, global warming ,species extinction and so forth, have been a great headache to most nations who always trap into a dilemma between economic development  and ecological balance. 2.各个种族和宗教间的武装冲突是一个持续性的问题,这对世界的和平与和谐造成了威胁。
Arm conflict among various races and religions is another endless problem posing a large threat to world peace and harmony. 
结尾段  To sum up, although a lack of knowledge concerning how to control human desire seems to be a big handicap to human civilization, it should be admitted that we have made a great progress in many fields , and the advancement is expected to continue. 

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语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者词汇表达较多样灵活,也能较准确地使用高级词汇;作者句法基础较为扎实。

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