文中词汇表达不够丰富,要多积累高级词汇;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词。
My school is in Sanya City,Hainan province and my school is in the Phoenix primary school. Do you know?I am a grade two student in primary school,my first grade teacher was Mai-hong Ting teacher,now the teacher in charge(my two grade teacher) is Gao-lei teacher and math teacher is Li-you Jin.My school is very pretty.