文中词汇表达不够丰富,要多积累高级词汇;文章层次清晰分明,但是文中很少使用过渡词和衔接词;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒。
My school is on Sanya City,Hainan province and my school is the Phoenix primary school. Do you know?I am a pupil of grade two and my first grade charge teacher was Mai-hong Ting teacher and now the teacher in charge is Gao-lei teacher and math teacher is Li-you Jin.My school is very pretty.