文中词汇表达不够丰富,要多积累高级词汇;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;结构较为严谨,文中衔接成分很少。
My school is on Sanya City,Hainan province and my school is the Phoenix primary school.Do you know? I am a pupil of grade two and my first grade charge teacher was Mai-hong Ting teacher.And now the teacher in charge is Gao-lei teacher and math teacher is Li-you Jin.My school is very pretty.